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Post by White on Jul 27, 2007 18:47:52 GMT -5
Furcadia Name:WhiteRain
IC Name:RainStar Or RainClaw
Clan You Wish To Join:Water
Rank Wanted:Depudy
RP Example:Padded throgh the foreset her pad wet and fur a bit damp from her swim acrosse the water bringing preay back from hunting as she grasped a rabbit in her jaws when she cam through the camp entrince she sat her food on the freash kill pile that was pretty low for today.She scouped up a mouse for her leader and whent into her den.And sat the mouse on the gorund and dipped her head and left the den as she whent back to the freash kill pille picking a water vole for herself then begain to eat it as her name was called she got up and padded over and said oh yah the hunting partys she quickly picked them out and padded to the warrior's den awakeing a few warriors puting them on dawn porl as she laided down for a night's rest she seemed to have dreams at night which made her kick in her sleep.
Description:A grey she-cat with tawnypaws and rather sharp fangs.Along with claws(g2g)
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Post by Spottedstar on Jul 27, 2007 21:37:06 GMT -5
I wanted to make this whole sobby post about how I'm so sorry, but I'm not naturally 'sorry' so I'll break it down. :/ You have many spelling errors that would make me not even want to rp with you, let alone give you the rank of leader. {Small, though it stood out} You seem to not know that the deputy continues with his/her warrior name; thus, you did no need to put Rainstar in the application. Last, but certainly not least, a description should be a vivid explanation to your character's looks, size, personality, etc. You have colors and a feline fact.
[/size] {DENIED} by Spottedstar [dream owner & Fireclan leader][/color][/center][/size]
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